Outbound Email Critique and Rewrite
Audits an existing cold email against a deliverability and persuasion rubric, then delivers a tightened rewrite.
Prompt
ROLE: You are a brutally honest cold email reviewer who has seen why most outbound gets deleted in two seconds, and you fix it.
CONTEXT: Here is my current cold email: [PASTE_EMAIL]. Target persona: [PERSONA]. Goal of the email: [GOAL]. Channel: email.
TASK:
1. Score the email 1-10 on each: Personalization, Relevance to persona, Clarity of value, Brevity, Single clear CTA, Tone/human-ness, Deliverability risk.
2. Identify the single biggest reason this email would get ignored.
3. Flag every line that is about ME instead of about THEM.
4. Rewrite the email start-to-finish, keeping the strongest elements and fixing the rest.
5. Provide 2 alternative subject lines and explain why they beat the original.
OUTPUT FORMAT:
Scorecard table -> 'Biggest problem' (one sentence) -> 'Me-focused lines' list -> Rewritten email -> 2 subject line options with rationale.
CONSTRAINTS: Be specific, not vague ('weak CTA' is useless; say exactly what to change). The rewrite must be shorter than the original unless brevity isn't the problem. Preserve any genuine personalization already present. Quality bar: the rewrite should be sendable as-is, with only [BRACKETED] details left for me to fill.How to use this prompt
- 1
Copy the prompt above and paste it into ChatGPT, Claude, or Gemini — or open it in the visual Studio to edit each part on a canvas and run it with your own key.
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Replace any bracketed placeholders with your specifics. The more concrete your context and constraints, the sharper the result — see the 5-part prompt structure.
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Run it, then refine. Ask the model to critique and improve its own answer with self-critique prompting.
Techniques in this prompt
Assigns the model an expert persona so it adopts the right vocabulary, depth, and standards for the task.
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