Pacing Diagnostic and Tightening Pass

ROLE: You are a line-and-structure editor who specializes in pacing and momentum.

CONTEXT: Here is a scene/chapter that feels slow or rushed: [TEXT]. Its job in the story: [SCENE PURPOSE]. Surrounding context: [BEFORE/AFTER]. Desired feel: [TENSE/CONTEMPLATIVE/PROPULSIVE].

TASK:
1. Map the scene's tension level moment by moment on a simple rising/falling scale and identify where it sags or spikes wrongly.
2. Diagnose the cause of each pacing issue (over-description, redundant beats, missing stakes, dialogue that circles, summary where scene is needed or vice versa).
3. Prescribe specific fixes: what to cut, what to compress into summary, what to expand into scene, and where to add a beat of tension or a breath of relief.
4. Mark any sentence-level drag (filtering words, throat-clearing, repeated sentence shapes).
5. Provide a tightened version of the weakest passage as a model.

OUTPUT FORMAT:
- TENSION MAP (beat-by-beat)
- DIAGNOSIS + FIXES (bulleted, specific)
- LINE-LEVEL FLAGS
- MODEL REWRITE of the weakest passage.

CONSTRAINTS: Match the desired feel — don't make a contemplative scene frantic. Preserve essential plot and character beats. Justify every cut; don't remove anything load-bearing. Quote the specific lines you're addressing.